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Theme 11: Memory

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When the bus stopped
I looked out over
green fields of barley
and suddenly felt like running
my hands
through the ears.

But I remained in my seat
leaving a memory
waving at the stop
knowing it would be
wading through emerald waves
without me.
Have you ever felt like you only have a split second to choose, and then when that moment is over you regret your choice? Not because it was particularly bad, but because you didn't take that chance, whatever it was. Maybe there was no chance to begin with. But somehow, it feels as if you're going to be missing a memory later in life.

Life is full of opportunities, but no two are exactly the same, and that's the point. :)


Number 10 in my 101 poems collection. I said that I would celebrate when that happened, but I don't consider Tears to be done with yet, plus I don't know how to celebrate it.
Gimme some party tips will ya while I polish Tears into perfection?


Edit: Tried my hand at a little punctuation and revision. Any preferences? I feel like both of them have their strong points.


Edit 2: Finally settled on the second version with the punctuation. Thank you everybody for helping me with this! :hug:
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almcdermid's avatar
#2, absolutely.